1. 강하게 쏘는것을 위로 쏘는게 아니라, 쏘는 것은 코쪽으로 쏘는 것
2. 호흡 계속 갖고 있는것 ( 한호흡)
3. 끝음 떨어지지 않게
4. 랩하듯이 뱉고 강약이 있어야 한다
5. 턱 아래 생각

Before

I'm living in seoul. My house where i live in now is at the front of my university.
My house is so small, so I want to explain about my original house.
It is at the gyeong gi do and it is near seoul.
It is four bedroom apartment and it is on 14floor of a 20 stroy apartment.
The size of house is big but It is in a corner so It is not good at traffic.
Anyway,The first thing you see when you step in to my original house is the entrance area, where you can take off your shoes.
According to Korean culture, people take off their shoes before entering.
Anyway, on the left there is a kitchen and on the right there is my private room.
My private room is at front of the bathroom so I can take whenever I'm in a hurry.
I like my house but As I said It is not good at traffic so I cannot go my original house often.
thank you

After

I'm living in seoul. My house where i live now is at the front of my university.
My house is so small, so I want to explain about my original house.
It is at the gyeong gi do and it is near seoul.
the traffic in here is not good.
It is a four bedroom apartment and it is on the 14th floor of a 20-stroy apartment building.
The size of the house is big but It is located in a corner so It is not good at traffic.
The first thing you see when you step in to my original house is the entrance area, where you can take off your shoes.
According to Korean culture, people should take off their shoes before entering.
on the left there is a kitchen and on the right there is my private room.
My private room is at the front of the bathroom so I can go in there whenever I'm in a hurry.
the location is not good at traffic so i cannot go back to my original house often.

피드백

1. the, a 붙이는거 잘할 것
2. let me repeat again
3. you know, anyway
4. 할말 없을 때는 impression ( i feel like comfotable / I feel so amaizing 등 )
5. describe 3층이 있고, 30m거리에는 뭐가 있고 등등

숙제

neighbor, neighborhood